I need to crack on with this story this week, I’m being distracted by evil, evil bunnies. Anyway, here’s a little more of Rider and Sutton:
Anger smashed into Sutton, taking away all reason. His fist flew and connected with Rider’s jaw. The raw satisfaction burned away the pain. He grabbed the lurching man and barrelled him back. Sutton shoved him chest-first against the wall, his force driving all air out of Rider’s lungs. “You’ll be the last mistake I make.”
KIM KNOX 
OUCH- but I want more…great 6 and love the tension
Wow thanks for all the great comments! I’m about 6k away from finishing this story. I needed a bit of a break – wrote some m/f for a while, lmao – Rider and Sutton can get a bit *too* intense 🙂
Fight, fight, fight!
0.o What are they fighting over? Can I hire him as my body guard with benefits? LOL
Very powerful six. 🙂
What an awesome Six. I can’t WAIT to read this!!!
Awesome! I can feel the anger!
So much emotion in this. I can instantly see all the pent up anger.
Great action six!
Excellent tension! Really liked your post. 🙂
nice descriptive action scene — but wish I could read more!
Well now, that’s a change from last week, but it’s every bit as good. Though I will admit not quite as yummy.
I can’t help wondering what’s going on – what caused this rage. Great six!
Violent and visceral. You can feel the anger.
Wow, these two characters are written with such power. I can sense Sutton’s rage–maybe born of denial?–and the brutal aggression he’s focused on Rider. (Somehow I think they’re both going to come away from this with more than just shiners and bruises.)
oooh! *Claps hands* More, more!
Woot! Fight! Fight! (Heh. I feel like I’m back in elementary school.)
Great action and fight!
Gritty, tense and vivid.
So much intensity between these two!
Good fight description. Good stuff, I want more!
Mmm, nice.
*purr*
Throw some carrots at those bunnies and get back to work! LOL
Oh! Great. It felt like I was there.
Powerful action scene! Great six!
Damn, I love this scene and NEED to read more!!
Great action! So intense.
I love a well written fight scene. You pulled me right in.
This story is so tense and emotional. Great sense of tactile senses.
love a concise action scene. the power and force between these guys is shown wonderfully.
Great action verbs, visceral!
Wow, very graphic. Well done!